DieBuche's picture

Hi, my first post.. I'm a graphic design student at the UdK in Berlin. I've been working on this for two months now, so I wanted to gather some additional critique before I start with the bold cut.

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riccard0's picture

Nice one.
Two things I noticed: the cut of ascenders and descenders could be a bit less steep, and the spacing of closing « is too tight.

eliason's picture

Proportions generally look good!
The horizontals of /E/F/L/T/ may be a little too stiff?
I don't get the ear on the /8/.
The varying near-horizontal angles on the bottom half of /g/ get kind of noisy.
For this style, I think a little horizontal connector at the join of /k/K/ might be suitable.
/e/ may be a little too tightly wound in the middle.

1996type's picture

Don't start with the bold cut yet.

Bowls of /a/ and /e/ should be about the same size. I would make the bowl of /e/ larger.

The tails on /h l n/ don't make sense unless you carry it through in the entire font.

/g/ needs to be cleaner.

The stroke endings on /v w x y/ just don't do it for me.

Crossbar of /f/ and /t/ could be longer (to the right)

Caps need to be cleaner. /H U/ are too narrow. /V/ is too wide.

The ascender on /t/ is a bit too tall IMO.

You have too many different concepts going on. For example the dots on /i j/, the dot in the /zero/ and the dots on /divided by/ are all different. A typeface needs to express unity.

Good luck!

Cheers, jasper

DieBuche's picture

Thanks guys!
Regarding the tails of /h l n/, I had them on more letters previously but on some characters the looked forced and introduced spacing issues ( e.g. /i f/ )
But you're right about the points, I changed them on the /i j/ but forgot to mirror that change across the other chars

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