any comment?

the kerning needs some major work

thank you for these useful comments,
im sure you saw that im a beginner, i will probably pay designer

one more question...
what is bigger problem? technique or whole concept is going in wrong direction?

what you think about this?

to be totally frank here: I think you're over-working it.

I think the whole 'dimensional and shiny' think really detracts from your mark, as does the tag-line.

What about a slightly bigger logo (probably 1.5 the height of the text) and just like this:

Black outline, solid blue fill, and the worm either as it is, or as a white silhouette

and for the text, don't do the highlight because it's just detracting from legibility. try a solid black, and a solid blue.

Now, on a logical standpoint, I believe the com owns the period, not the sworms. (black)sworms(blue begins).com

Next, the first thing I noticed with your tagline was that it read like this to me: Community of creaming. I'm not sure what kind of community this is, but softening the s and the worms made me just skip them entirely.

I don't find that the font of the tagline matches the font of the signature, but when you do update it, what if the entire tagline was blue (to make it less dominant than the signature)

I'd like to see an updated version with these changes at least, there's certainly a lot more than could be done with it and it does have potential, but you've gotta be open-minded and trust us here - this is what we're passionate about and we wouldn't misguide you.

best of luck!

@frode
why rude... man, I am happy to accept any critique, because I don't have any good designer in surroundings,
when you do design vanity is not acceptable (am not designer but im trying to do that job at a moment)

@innovati
thank you a lot, I will do this. expect new version in matter of hours..

I hope you will all be here to help me working this out.

Shu, you should consider his offer, this is tight and on track.

Thanks guys, I'm glad you like 'em!

go with sobering. really like how the ball serifs feel like little worms/creatures. i might adjust the "o" dialogue box a little though

w|m

"really like how the ball serifs feel like little worms/creatures."

I thought the same thing!

Wow, for a quick and dirty, five minute mockup, it's getting great responses! Thank-you so much, guys!

That is perfect Sobering!

Nice work, Sobering! I wonder what font that is...

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you guys are joking right?

archer