feedback or suggestions on massive change poster

abayarde's picture

I had an assignment to make a exibition poster for massive change using purely text. Massive change is about how design can change the world. Any feedback or suggestions would be greatly appericated. I was not sure what colors to use, but i have experimented with different colors and my top favorites are black and white, red, orange and green. For more information on massive change please visit their website: http://www.massivechange.com/about

abayarde's picture

is there a reason why posters arent posting? can someone please help me, i am a first time typophile user.

timd's picture

I can't speak for anyone else but I find it difficult to crit it without being able to see the whole image. However I think you have too much going on in the globe I would look for more contrast between landmass and ocean. I think you also need to work on the vertically distorted type, especially on the crossbars and some of the black areas (for example, the deep crotch of the V). Now you have distorted it you can use it as a template to draw up the lettering, CHANGE, with plenty of horizontal features, is forming a curve which is beginning to work; MASSIVE, on the other hand, doesn't have those horizontal features the large areas of black in the M, base of the S's and V are drawing attention away from the other characters. Also look at using an en dash to separate the dates and increasing the point size of the url so you don't have to track it out.
Tim

Lex Kominek's picture

I can't see any images. Make sure your files are RGB and not CMYK.

- Lex

paul d hunt's picture

can someone please help me, i am a first time typophile user.

i edited your image as per technical guidelines and deleted a couple duplicate posts. i'd recommend if you're new to the site reading the Read Me.

Lex Kominek's picture

I'm not a fan of the vertically stretched lettering in the background. Why did you use a different font for this than you did for the rest of the text?

Otherwise, I think the design is quite strong. I do agree with Tim's comments though.

- Lex

lore's picture

Hi Daniel
Sorry, I hope you don't mind but I'm not sure I like it at all...
There are few things I don't get (but maybe it's me):
1) weren't you supposed to use text only? So why the globe?
2) I read the massive change website and I know it's not your fault but I don't understand what their plan is. I mean it seems all so vague...

ycole's picture

there are some parts where the little 'fill' characters don't meet up with the borders of the globe. also i might make them a less intense shade, maybe a gray, and then make them more dense... the problem is they're too busy. i know any more dense and you might not be able to recognize that they're characters... but as it is now... you get the idea.

compositionally it works though. the idea of 'massive' comes across strongly.

abayarde's picture

I cleaned up the fill characters, and added the en dash to the date. I also decided to change the color from a loud bold red to a shocking green. To answer lore's questions, we are allowed to draw geometrical shapes, in my case, i used it as an outline for the globe. As for massive change, the best way i could summerize their plan is to create a greater awareness of the power of design. To get back on ycole's comment on making the fill characters a gray, i have done it, and i was not pleased on how it looked. It looked dull and did not blend(into massive change) as well as black text would. Thank you guys from your comments and suggestions. Feel free to keep them coming.


timd's picture

An improvement on the Massive Change lettering, although you still need to work on the depth of the horizontals of H & A and maybe open up the counter openings on C & G. You could shift the en-dash up a touch to centre on the uppercase characters and kern the numerals 16 and 31 closer.
Tim

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