Very Nice italic, I like it very much, specially the joined script one.

I think that the ascenders and descenders can be a pixel longer, this can be a matter of taste but I think that at least the " l " and the " t " do need it. Also think that the spacing can be a pixel tigther.

I edited the central column of the poem (it has a mark) to show how the color is enhaced by these modifications.

this is my new attempt
regards lv.